Podcast

The Collector - Final

Final draft

Draft

Mrs D

I agree with Dolby - especially regarding the sound levels. It is coming together nicely. Keep going back to your RMAs to remind you of the c and cs and start putting some text on soon.

Dolby

This is looking really interesting, work on the sound levels/volume, especially with the phone call - the narrative needs to be clear to the reader and often this is done with either dialogue or voiceover so if you are using neither then use lighting or other techniques to communicate clearly.The short takes are really interesting towards the end and add atmosphere and contrast.

Rough draft of opening

Obviously some clips need to be lengthened. The shortness of them is due to lagging on the editing software I am using.

Mrs D

I agree with Miss Dolby. You use short takes - is this common for the opening of films? I like the abrupt sound of the shower over the music. You will need to put some sound effects on top, in order to allow the audience to hear the movements of the character.